The bee staggers home
exhausted from the harvest
dinner and dancing
Laden with pollen
he pirouettes on his heel
and dusts himself off
You’ve been drinking and
flying again ! says the fat queen
No royal jelly !
by Emmjay
… back story: so I attended a duo of Haiku classes at Sydney Uni continuing education. Small class. Very experienced and lovely teacher. It were grand.
basic rules of haiku:
- three lines of 5:7:5 syllables – let’s not be obsessive about this – after all, we isn’t Japanese, is we ?
- something that evokes the natural world / the season (did you know that aboriginal cultures often regard Australia as having six seasons – look it up – I was labouring under the illusion that at best Australia had 2 or three seasons, wet, dry with hot or cold variants – not necessarily in any particular order.
- a kireji – or cut. – a breaking point where the poem whacks the reader a bit – see the last Haiku above – it has two cuts.
- there are other subtleties (like developing one’s own signature vocabulary – say using the word “arsehole” whenever the topic of Tony Abbott is on the table – you might like to use a different work for the same purpose – that’s up to you, but let’s not get ahead of ourselves here.
- so have a go – maybe read some translations of Basho, Buson or Issa – still top of the pops after 300 years or so……
gerard oosterman said:
keep going endless
age not weary them
endurance fortitude with courage
Sticks and stones
with river over pebbles
scurrying wombat into hole
Pigs can fly here
sky does light up
words are all around.
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Therese Trouserzoff said:
Thank you, Gez.
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vivienne29 said:
Very enlightening.
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Therese Trouserzoff said:
🙂
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Hung One On said:
Yo
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Therese Trouserzoff said:
Good to have you report in ! How’s it hanging’, Hung ?
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Hung One On said:
All good boss. Start serious van hunting Friday. Here’s my go,
My life is like a yoyo,up and down
With a ring of string I’m heading for the ground
The fall was nice but the sudden stop at the end is a killer
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