Corner walked down the hill to The Castle. Black was outside on the cement driveway entrance with the Balloonettes in the sun.
Corner wanted something.
Black was himself wondering what he should do about the day. He looked straight up at the sun.
“Oink,” Corner announced. Hardly customary. “Oink,” rejoindered Black and added an oink. “Oink!” To be fair. To be fair, Corner needed to be given a lot of field. He wouldn’t get it if Black was suddenly off the jokes. Like a lot of night club operators and day-time saloon frequenters, Black was good for the jokes. Corner was an isolate.
“Seen the other boys much?” This was Corner at his best. Corner was a drama queen short of a John Paul Young. Mind you he had one in the old vinyl record hold-all at his mother’s place. Love is in the Air. “Mind if we go in?” he enquired looking meaningfully at Black. They went to school together.
“Naah,” stretched Black and uncurled from where he had dropped into a half-crouch position with his arms resting lightly over his blue denim knees.
“Those jeans aren’t tight,” laughed Corner. Black growled and laughed an easy laugh. “You never can resist, Corner,” he said, stretched, scratched and yawned. “They’re spray-on these days. Left me short a week’s.” He followed Corner through the entrance to the house. The bare wooden boards without any treatment and no finish on their surface to make a conventional floor looked like a consignment of recycled and untreated timber. Freshly delivered and stacked dusty. The sound they gave off when walked over was a strangely comforting subdued tread. Evidence the plain room, empty other than for a couch, had begun with considered design. Love. Money. “Get on with it. You here because you’re a space or here because you want something to do. You can get these girls who live here some help. Dunno what you blokes do.” Black, lean and tense could look pretty well annoyed when he was useful and he flushed angry. It was all a game.
Corner saw the keg and acknowledged it by walking over to it and giving it a slap. ‘Nice to see you fellers are into the good stuff, eh?” Here was ritual. “Do y’want a taste,” scowled Black. “I’ll get you a glass. Spose y’re gonna tell me y’re on the day.”
“I’m on.”
A women’s voice, tired, slurred and floated in a whine from somewhere above them. “You black egg, don’ give arse sucker any of piss.”
Black ignored the directive. “C’mon,” and he got a glass off the bench that was covered in a towel and on it a batch of clean glasses from various hotels. “You don’t want one of these?”
He poured the glass full to its top and, extending his tongue out of his opened mouth, licked the rim in a seductive circle like a lover offering the first challenge of a new partner, never taking his eyes off Corner.
“Pffftt, not me, is the woman here?”
“Who and why? Dammit, don’t… .” Black was looking as if he would reach out and take hold of Corner like a wriggling piglet and carry him outside around the belly. Black never looked threatening to anybody other than his enemies.
Corner responded quickly and stepped backwards towards the door he had entered the premises through. “The woman with the Australian accent.”
Black was on the tips of his toes and moving almost like a cat when a cat scampers sideways in war play. His legs were stiffened in a manner he adopted to sustain his athletic balance and momentum in a challenge directly aimed at the man who had become, again, his adversary. “Why!” he demanded, startling, his face suffused with the characteristic black of the experience of his rage. “You don’t want to make any mistakes, Simon.”
Corner had exited the door and was on his way off the property. He was no equal to Black. He hesitated, eyeing the Balloonettes. The young women giggled. One was braiding another’s hair. The third painted their client’s fingernails on a hand extended at flat rest on a river rock. Where the women had moved to sit cross-legged by it on the ground. They had been able from there to witness something of what happened in the house when Corner and Black had gone inside.
“Come back here,” demanded Black. He was taking off his silver skull ring and sliding it with one hand flattened into the fob pocket of his jeans. Corner whirled. “Keep your hair on, Black” he managed to hiss in time as his opponent drew close enough to hit him, “She telephoned the Station she left that black leather coat in a phone booth.” Black pulled up sharp. He rested back at ease on the heels of his sneakers,
“Whaa, man? O, you’re a sleaze. Phone booth. Why didn’t you say so. She’ll be looking for that. Gee, that was stupid. Here. Give me your details so I can get her to ring you. Geez, you should say.”
“Don’t worry, Black, it was you I came to see. She knows where we are. You know she knows where we all are.” He smirked, cocky again. “That’s all, but tell her I came to see her.”
Black didn’t say anything. He was surrounded by the women and fussed to join them by the rock so he could braid the hairdresser’s hair. Corner swung the height of the drive. He had a distinctive lope.
“What would you be?” Siratha, the talented beauty artist now having her hair braided asked Black. She had sat as pretty as a picture on the rock and was still. “What would you be if you had not been… what you are?”
“When I went to Sydney I was running that brothel in a week, it was when I first realised what I wanted to really be. It doesn’t matter now. Give me the band. Here. Have mine. I never got around to it. Business. I was only 16. It doesn’t matter.”
Siratha stood and faced Black where the sun was a rivulet of sheening over the face of the bodice of her gown. Tiny metallic trinkets sewn by her into the fabric played at the sun. She lifted the hem of her skirt and extended it in a drape as a dancer would to make a curtsey. She bobbed. Straightened. “Say what would someone be if… they weren’t a bank robber,” she giggled in a rush of infectious laugh and stood closer in response to being waved by Black to him so he could tidy a strand of hair. “I will tell you as long as you don’t laugh,” he said, grave. He stepped back.
“I won’t laugh,” she giggled, and he frowned so she stopped.
“A florist. I would have liked to have been a florist. That seems to me to be a perfect, lovely way to make a living.” The pealing laughter of the three women as they scampered and rolled on the excavation dirt to collect it in their hair and rough house each other as they rolled caught an eventual echo that was returned them by their play. They lay entwined sharing the liberation of their philosophy and the warmth of the earth on their skin and in the dirt in their hair. Black had left to go to the shop.
Sandshoe
21/11/10
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I really enjoyed this Shoe. Absurd without being ridiculous and best of all funny, but with no need to laugh, (“Black was good for the jokes. Corner was an isolate.”), but I can’t help feeling there’s something I’m not getting and I’m wondering what it is.
Remember this? I can’t get it out of my head since reading your piece.
Pressed Rat and Warthog
Baker/Taylor
Pressed rat and warthog have closed down their shop.
They didn’t want to; ’twas all they had got.
Selling atonal apples, amplified heat,
And pressed rat’s collection of dog legs and feet.
Sadly they left, telling no one goodbye.
Pressed rat wore red jodhpurs, warthog a striped tie.
Between them, they carried a three-legged sack,
Went straight round the corner and never came back.
Pressed rat and warthog have closed down their shop.
The bad captain madman had told them to stop
Selling atonal apples, amplified heat,
And pressed rat’s collection of dog legs and feet.
The bad captain madman had ordered their fate.
He laughed and stomped off with a nautical gate.
The gate turned into a deroga tree
And his pegleg got woodworm and broke into three.
Pressed rat and warthog have closed down their shop.
They didn’t want to; ’twas all they had got.
Selling atonal apples, amplified heat,
And pressed rat’s collection of dog legs and feet.
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Warrigal, that is perfect music to me alone your fancy is tickled and you have been engaged by Corner and Black.
I wrote this with such crafted intent I did not laugh in the least. I wanted it ‘edgy’. I laugh now each reading more at the absurdity 🙂
What you say is helpful to me, most because I have responded to a curiosity or two in my own mind and, think, resolved how to treat this episode in view of its succeeding episodes.
Pressed Rat and Warthog, eh and their ‘atonal apples”… well that is fabulous an addition, I fess I am unnerved that is so close to its pertinent truth, v close to the canvas of this actual story, to its greasepaint and crowd … true, there is the folkness of human experience, the battle of need and greed, the drive to dance and sing, make song, paint pictures, but sooo close… but wait, that would be telling as your insight and intuition still not close enough to know what part of the story I am next telling. 🙂
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The next episode, partly written and more in scraps, begins with a busker, who is the closest semblance of an individual you could possibly imagine to Pressed Rat … crikey, Warrigal. 🙂
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Sandshoe, I think I’m finally getting the hang of your idiom; I actually more or less understood that story this time… though it’s still a bit ‘trippy’! But enjoyably so…
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astyages, dear astyages, that you have gone the further distance of reading the tale again certainly brings a smile to my face. I’ll wink.
😉
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I don’t know abour MERV but your story is sure written with lots of verve. Perhaps you have lived amongst those that you have written about. In any case, you would have experienced some of those events and added or expanded on those. It is again another joy-ride from a generous spirit.
This seems an improved edition of the previous one or have I read this one more carefully? Thanks Shoe.
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I have. Lived in the environment, Gez. I have some more recent specialist knowledge of housing (I have been to some big conference events), and experience as a community activist acquired in the wider rock and roll sometimes regrettably referred to as ‘the volunteer sector’. I didn’t set out to count, mind you, volunteering as a career per se. I was seeking answers to questions I formed about training programmes in community and health sectors and their efficacy, across the board (Maslow’s hierarchy of needs) particularly mental health and hoped to contribute to the community in some smaller or larger way.
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This story is a partly imaginative take on the experience however that rolls out as I write, the only thing that is ‘true’ is my sincere attempt to do the characters I have used as models ‘justice’ so they are not trivialised. That appears to have worked indeed, in this preliminary episode.
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Your helpful feedback Gerard is a great start to set the foundation stone of a yes, I think, ripping good yarn (verve) in place. There is a fair old telling in it. Some more of it is written and the next episode won’t go the way of Hell Hospital I hope that waits its creator’s attention in his wings. 🙂
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Regards this impression that this is improved. I learned from a clever daughter who taught me almost everything I know about everything this tip. I was running a business and some product would not sell. I decided to employ her when she was 16 as a consultant and tell me what was wrong with its environment on a prominent presentation stand, explained the problem. She looked at it for a considered hour as I asked her. She reccommended I move a poster on a wall about two inches to one side (I had asked what did she think about moving the stand and where). Tried to refuse my intention to pay her. Rejected my exhortation I believed nobody could offer any better solution. I found the product beginning to move the next morning and it sold out in 48 hours after being inexplicably on the shelf for weeks without a nible of interest let alone sale.
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I moved a couple of sentences to improve the visual impact of the story, Gerard. I as well fixed up a juxtaposition of two words that didn’t work, and a name was wrong in the previous edition in two places, that ruined the relatively now easy flow.
Because an edition that was the latest escaped emmjay’s attention when he loaded the previous, it gave me an opportunity as well to assess the graphic. None has ever been published before (the series is done on A4 typing paper) and I had no idea how to size it, but now sent emmjay a copy reduced in size which means it is more of an accompaniment…at least now I see the effect and know I need to spend time in a Photoshop program or hand these all (I have more) over eventually to some experts in online and print . 🙂
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My bent is jest when I advise my clever daughter taught me everything I know about everything. I have various daughters and sons who might make that application were I genial to suggestion I know less than any one of these beings. Curious that may seem to them as they gather some increasing years. :).
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Funny one, sandshoe, have you lived in shared households much on your travels,
this comes across as pretty authentic…glasses from different drinking places, rough floors, LOL…
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H, I am thrilled by your comment. The big LOL you award this is a joy.
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Of course when we write H., we seek to find our way into the very core of a reader’s capacity to identify with and respond well to our eventual presentation to them of our story. Especially when a subject is controversial or a story carries and gathers “no moss”, may be friendless, the isolating result of living rough, residence in squats, living ‘outside the pale’ and even for those who have a home or a notion of one-a traveller, maybe-drawn to the life styles lived in the restrictive and oddly even expansive culture of inner city squats and doss houses, back packers, including on park benches, where nothing and everything can seem simultaneous. Where science is discussed. Culture analysed. Tragedians born.
Where the homeless do die unknown.
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Other readers who have not read Steinbeck might equate their experience with a writer from far more recent contemporaneity and an Australian writer. I did love reading the American Steinbeck. Steinbeck knocked around. He got to know the lay of the land and the people of that environment whomsoever they were and recorded the eccentricities of their behaviour. The pair who lived in a half a water tank with a door cut in it ‘humoured’ me (‘Cannery Row’ or ‘Sweet Thursday’). My impression remains the wife had the hubby agree to secure/glue to its inner wall fabric she fashioned to the appearance of a curtain because she wanted to enjoy a real home.
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I entirely ‘collected’ in my mind the numbers of oddly matched hotel glasses I have seen in op shops, washed and presented them on the teatowel in this story purely to indicate something about the style of the inhabitants of the address, that they are varied, include transients, and hoping to attract by that image the interest of a reader who might otherwise avoid The Castle on grounds of ‘catching something’. The residents are living according to a standard, suggestion is there are a number and so who are they, where are they. And who knows, perhaps a reader who does not admire, I do not, stolen or anybody stealing beer glasses from hotels might return to read another episode out of curiosity to discover if Corner inexplicably busts someone for the abundance in front of his nose of evidence of theft (I am myself curious does anybody ever get just desserts for thieving from public hotels and hostelry?)
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Sandshoe, in a small pond like The Pigs one has to be so careful, therefore I’d like to add that I’m not saying that you have lived in doss houses, my question was really a compliment, because to get the tone authentic some people have to write only of what they have experienced…
Sometimes when reading a male author writing about a woman’s psyche and getting it just right, I think: wow , how does he know what I think and feel 🙂
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H, I did mean to refer specifically to your use of the word ‘authentic’ because that is an enormous compliment to me. I do hope for this writing to get a due break into some useful market, so my task is now to maintain writing with this authentic edge you have so enjoyed.
The only name that is ‘authentic’ thus far is the colloquial name of the address ‘The Castle’ that was a popular squat. I did share that accommodation for a while. Some of its details will simply merge into the border beween reality and imagination as I tell this story. Ask away anything, H as you want. I’ll do my best.
I do think I have shown a dramatic ability to write the characters in this third person. Each stands on its own merits. Thank you, H.
I am only too pleased to respond to someone about this writing. When I wobble a bit around and off the subject in replying, this is the result of this idea being 30 years in the making with little cross reference. Pull me up and set me on track when I am a wandering minstrel. 🙂
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We do hear more about the glasses. They are a prop for me to use to underline as well entirely interesting dimensions of Black’s character. New writers, I am not suggesting to make up things willy-nilly as if there is no tomorrows end to the lies that writers can tell 🙂 … but let your mind run free (myself, I do prefer to where there is no barbed harm!).
A writer is a sort of scientist engaged in imagining and imaging subject matters of life and death. Identifying the elements of a story. Looking for and ‘listing’ ingredients to add colour, maybe to enjoy setting off an ‘explosion’ of mirth as H., you have been triggered. 🙂
Reading appreciation of the ilk directed to my stories is like having watched a public display of fireworks on a balmy night in the local council park with our nearest and dearest, when the grass is verdant, our arms are linked and our hands with loved ones, there is no fire danger and we are all here after, virtually drinking and a little flushed by our exertions-laughing and talking- and the contrast of the night air outside and inside The Pigs Arms.
Thank you, piglets.
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Great again, sands!
A quirkily told love story with pathos and punch, with banter and bravado and with a boozy bathos. (The way Black proffers a glass of the good stuff would make any woman squirm, I reckon). All taking place upon the dusty timbers of the Old Globe theatre. Juliet has a new look and Othello is his old true threatening sleaze bag…
Or so I reckon!
The picture is also great!
Sis and her hubby were florists for a while, until she hit him over the head with a bunch of roses he forgot to put in the fridge at the end of the previous day. After that he kept making garlands for her hair with daisies and chrysanthemummies!
This has been such a confusing week… and it’s only Wednesday yet!
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This is darling of you Atomou to move some of your comment to this post from the ‘incorrect’ one! I will collect some of the replies I made! I am also honoured to be carrying in attachment to my story yours regards Sis and her hubby making garlands of daisies and chrysanthemummies! 🙂
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Cripes! I do hope it is Tuesday.
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Don’t worry Vivienne, atomou’s getting a bit ahead of himself…
Ato, don’t worry mate; you now have a whole ‘nother day to do whatever you thought you had to get ready for tomorrow…
🙂
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See? I’m so confused! One minute it’s Sunday, then, before you know it’s Yesterday and then off we go to tomorrow! When will it all end? Friday?
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Funny! I so frequently mention Jack Steinbeck’s ‘Sweet Thursday’!
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I quite like the Moody Blues, “Tuesday Afternoon”…
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It being Wednesday I went looking and stumbled on the lyrics of John Frusciantes’ ‘Wednesday’ and therein I thought there are some interesting ideas as far as I can understand them.
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Saturday Night’s alright for fighting!
😉
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Dear ‘Shoe and patrons de porc, please accept my humble apologies for posting an incorrect version of the Picnic.
I’m a useless bum – but then, no surprises here.
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Emmjay! What has betook you! I have been peremptory or something! In my request of you to pull the other edition of ‘The Florist’! Alright then, be a useless bum if that’s your quest. Can I help provide you any guides along that path? No, I think not on reflection. You have been commented on before as wanting I think you are trying to say! You’re the man for the ‘useless bum’s’ job. Hell, piglets all, this is a turnip for the books! Where’s Merv! MERV! Someone fetch MERV!
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I thought Merv might be around to pour emmjay a little rum toddy-just medicinal.
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Emmjay, do I have to send you over to Aunt Mary’s?
🙂
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